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The voice and tone is good but I feel it does not provide enough gravity to the heavy fightinng near hoogerheide, and Waclheren. I would like to see more of the emotional weight of the fighting in that area, and the toll it took on the soldiers. The report should not shy away from the brutality of the fighting, and should give a sense of the fear and uncertainty that the soldiers must have felt during those battles. Though, if it is missing from the war diary, it is not a problem to omit it from the report. I just want to make sure that we are not sanitizing the experience for the family, and that we are giving them a sense of what their ancestor went through during those battles.
We can expand on the voice when we use other texts in the future such as CP Staceys The Victory Campaign.